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Old 11-13-04, 09:20 PM   #2
Ysdat
Whys That?
 
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deep...
Your rhyme scheme is simple. you just use endliner's.
Try using bigger word's. That way it is easier to create a multi out of it.
Instead of .
were,there,here,care....<<<those are simple rhyme's.

overall ok drop.
4/10
keep dropping and elevating.
pz
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