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Old 11-15-04, 11:28 AM   #4
Loveliss Grandz
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"It Takes Time To Make Shit Rhyme But It Aint A Crime Dying For Lying/
But My Mind Is Sleeping Height To Nine So Im Trying To Figure How's Working/"
LYING AND WORKING DON'T RHYME.U WERE KINDA OFF FROM THE START.I GOT THE JIST OF IT BUT U GOTTA MAKE IT SO I DON'T HAVE TO WORK SO HARD TO DO SO.
UR WORDS DIDN'T FLOW TOGETHER WELL EITHER.I ENJOYED READING THIS BUT U DIDN'T GIVE THIS UR ALL.NEEDS IMPROVEMENT.5/10.KEEP EM COMIN'.
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I'm like CHUCKy dyin' to live in the flesh free of the BATTERY,
ASSAULT n ROBBERY rapidly,wishin' cupid would clap at me
N lift this evil spell so I can experience happilly evil backwards-see(down there)
EVIL............backwards =............LIVE
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