Hates Fucking Idiots
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sometimes I just wanna shut my room and be all alone
just lets some fuckin self asteem of shout and moan
^ flows but 2nd line wacked it out wit the wording
Cause I keep gettin into these fuckin petty arguments
and fuck bitch ur wasteing my time so i'll be all offence
^ weak rhyme not a strong bar
can't stop thoughts in my head shreddin impulses sendin
all these fuckin thoughts deep in are mix wid junk blendin
^ an aight bar prolly the best u put out nice wordplay
to confuzed but an't gonna back down and lose
sick off the abuse bitch fuck off bitch you fuckin jews!
^ 1st line aight but 2nd line ruined it
im swingin on my own like an army need someone to carm me
fuck all this preassure in my head is makin me go fuckin barmy
^ armys aint alone...2nd line aight
and bitch you don't judge you don't even know me so blowme
I only get on wid dudes who act kool and real who are homies
^ flowed but the closer was weak a basic multi though
Overall 4.5/10 u need to add more wordplay and also take time to word ya verse out better
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List of people who've Ducked Me:
KnightShade
mAtW
Bizzy
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