this was a nice poem. i especially liked the first 2 lines. very imaginative and descriptive. i appreciate the structure the way you worked from one sentence to the next. good work. return the favour on my open mic.
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Spit it from the heart, spit a thousand darts, split ya head apart…
Emcees depart, like rubin carter my hurricane left u scarred…
Like a spiked bat grammatical bar, like a wonderland drug…
Tumble - ing like a flagon of rum and 2 blunts, like the funk baby…