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Old 11-17-04, 11:55 AM   #7
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here is a full brake down...
INCEPTION:

say you hold loose change in ya pocket while i find 4 or 5 dimes
but beef son ima alwayz have my handz on 2 nines like a clock broke at 9:45
took me a sec to look at my watch N get the punch NICE...

dawg if you was rappin to ya heart only way you spittin acoss a beat
you aint gutta,so only tyme you nice on tha block is helpin old ladies across tha street
1st line i was feeling it, 2ed went weak....

IF YOU WORK AT IT YOU TOO COULD B AS GOOD AS ME
DAMN EVEN IF I MOVED OUTTA LAS VEGAS YOU WOULD STYLL NV
ummm ok?

Ignore Precision...Sikz Bout To *End Your Beginnin* Like *Jealous Sniperz*
The Desire To Fire Iz Minez...You'd Rather *Puzh Around Kartz* Lyke *Homelezz Recyclerz*
1st line nah i wasnt feeling, 2ed was nice but this whole bar could of been re-word- it better to hit harder...

First Place Is Laced..I'm Great, You "Off Balance" Like "Fagz In Skates"
Image Of Hate..I Been Ill, You "Inherited Sickness" Like "Diseased Generic Traits"
1st line was so so ok, 2ed was nice N a preety good ending..

all around nice verse some bars was weak most were good some could of been re-worded to hit harder but all aroud not bad 7.3 outta 10...

next:

jay:

YeLL "ROOKIE DOWN" OddS CompliED even Ya "BookIE FroWNS"
you BETTER be VD Clean CAUSE I"m gonna eat this "PUSSY OUT"// 1)
not a bad opener... kinda nasty...

"LOOK IT NOW" as you "AWAKEN TO SEE" ya ass "DRAPING YA SHEETS"/
but U an YA rymes is like hobos in winter "BEGGING FOR HEAT"//2
decent...

"RaiD this FUCK" open his "chest up" to show his "CHARADE STUFFED"/
Even if this VIRGIN was dropped in war he still wouldnt get "LAID for BUSH"//3 (President BusH wordplay)
1st line ok.. 2ed line WAS FIRE FEELING IT CREATIVE N HARD..
nice shit...

"AFRAID to LOOK" only time he spits from da heart is when I "SLIT'em for SCARS"/
Only time ya INNER FLOW moving places is when U "PEE IN THEM CARS"//4 (Inner Flow-pissing heh)
haha nice hit danm...

This TART is ahead of hip hop cause he always has his "BACK on THAT"/
He "HALF ASSES" his rymes an yet he still manages to take a "CRAP on RAP"......//5

decent ending u could of end it better but NICE VERSe...
hella drop.. PUNCHES WAS GOOD WORD-PLAY WAS SICK, flow was good some places u could of fixed up a little bit N re-wored it but all around tight ass drop..

8.3 outta 10....
good battle fellas