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Old 11-18-04, 12:52 AM   #6
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Voted For: Maku JaiiLiin


...A'yo...

Like your battles...ya blinds need to be closed...
Keep to yaself...nobody wants anotha geek exposed
4/10
Ya gotta fucked up name...wat is a Maku Jailiin..?
Must be part of the reason you have a pic of Marylin Mansen
4/10
What are the Omens..? Bunch of rappers who are Gothic?
With faces so cold and pale...how can you drop hot shit?
2/10
I know I have shocked you...in a way that you cant breathe...
The only fact that I'm ill backs up...

..."I am what you Can't Be"...
2/10

2 much self glorification
vocab wasent there
and ya drop structure was off
seems like u were tryin 2 freestyle not battle
metas werent there
had ok similies
good personals


you to the slaughter I bring, herb, till aorta and things hurt//
from this part of his team, exposed as a lord of the rings nerd//
4/10*
ya couldn’t see my fist comin, now ya lip has been broke//
so the “blow” was unexpected,~ like a surprise shipment of coc//
If I’m seen packing heat, with the bullets to blast ya team//
I’ve killed one ya, I’d just need limited editions of magazines//
5/10**
Ya personal best, when I serve you a verb in a breath//
could turn to a mess, like epidermis from burners and teks//
4/10
externally wet, blood in turn stick ya shirt to ya chest//
and turn ya life into it’s second birth, before you learn that its death//
3/10
soften ya actions, cuz I’m too grimey and hard for you//
ya couldn’t be a rider, if bill gates cosigned on a car for you//
2/10
Defeating this lame, with a new lesson easy to gain//
I’ll reach in his brain, with bullets signatured, and teach him my name//
2/10

Ya vocab was beter
ya structure was bad
ya punches were ok
had a lil self glorification
Personals were alot better

Maku for better personals and better punches
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