yea, being a diss u shoulda added more vocab (better ones) cuz this was kinda simple but u did have assonance rhymes, but uhmm u need to work on either personals or punches take one at a time.. u can stick with punches then do personals for now til u get comfortable, then start using punches a lil' by a lil' then put all the shit together... and there u go..
get at me
pz..

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