View Single Post
Old 11-18-04, 07:46 PM   #24
intensify effect
Banned
 
intensify effect's Avatar
 
Posts: 2,626
IP:

Voted For: Tstorm

vote: tstorm....

REloaded this is how it is....
1) do not type ya verse like this...

im gonna kill ya blood spill-ya
if i tossed ya finger at ya buddy, still no-one feel's-ya /

^^ that look NOOBISH N weak N stupid dont skip a line just cuz u made a bar keep it going like tstome did peep hes verse he droped N u'rs the way it looks tstorm looks better so-far befor i even looked at what ya actully wrote....

2) get more creative N more detail punches...

your not a storm your just a breeze/
im bout to win this battle with ease/ (-- thats ya first bar N there was no personal no punch just slef-glorifying ya-self which is weak in a battle.....

wtf?..dumb herb setting this battle up before i even agreed?
well...with a 3-8 record,thats the only time uve taken a lead!
there was a nice personal there N punch thats how u start off a battle N continue to do so thru out the verse...

if u add multis ya verse would be a better read or if u got creative punches that would help also...
basicly think out the box N think of some out-rages shit u feel me...

all around tstome verse was a better read better punches better flow N all... 8.0

reloaded u need to elevate still try some open mic first N drop something RAW as if u was coming at someone sometime that can help u think outside the box........

im just trying to help u out reloaded insted of just say stomr won thats it...

keep them coming u will get better....