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Old 11-19-04, 10:54 PM   #24
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Like the weather...the chance of you winning is vain
like if you sold Strepsils...noone would choke in pain
first lines decent, not worded very good, second line is garbage Ive never heard of the word strepsil, cuz it doesn't exist in the english language. so the punch is non existant
your game...giving the word "failure" embarressment
claim you off da wack...when theres no comparisons
first line would be decent setup if it went somewhere but second line makes little sense punch is weak and its forced rhyme.
don't be arrogant...your ego's the size of a elephant
he even think showin' his 26-19 record is triumphant
realy forced rhyme, decent first line again but again the punch is weak, its decent for the fact its personal but could be improved.
I destroy you for enjoyment, so kid please don't fight
"Da Bury's Finest", that's why his corpse remains ripe
decent punch, its not very hard hitting but decent.... very simple rhyme scheme and rhyming fight with ripe is amatuer.
kid's not abstract...but you can't class him as object
kid's wack...no wonder Fashion's OPTIONAL SUBJECT!
crap rhyme better scheme than before but very simple rhymes, this is probly the most clever bar though so props for that, it was a weird punch but creative.
fact is this kid sucks, I'll destroy him with just a fork
who's using strings...a sewing machine does the work
o.k now your bars starting to look better, kinda funny punch here.
kid's a jerk...I'll rip him up and fucking sew him again
the only highlight of his verse is when he just began
weak punch here... it was goin good up until that.
the string's gonna snap...it don't matter how I say it
got numbers in his name...it's his wackness calculated
lol, thats a funny personal- I liked this.
to ranking 9487...that's more than RV's inactive heads
name's string...no wonder he's hanging on by a thread
decent punch, probly could have been worded better but you still goin personal so it helps.
he can't go far in his career...even if it's his big dream...
CAUSE NOONE KNOWS HOW LONGS A PIECE OF STRING!!!
wow this is probly the wackest closer Ive seen in a long time... the punch goes no-where, the first doesn't setup well-- boo.


this nigga just a Mule, cuz all u do is pack shit
neva heard ya single, guess u aint "radio"active
nice wordplay, better opener than your opponents, strong rhyme.
eh yo when them rifle's click
they have yo ass scramblin for safety like Michael Vick
first line kinda short, you probly could have thrown some wordplay or something in there to set up better, decent second line but I think a better setup would have really helped the punch.
I'll snipe this prick, got a vest thats twice as thick
but them things gon hit u, cuz lifes a bitch
kinda filler... sound better in an audio battle as far as text its not very clever.
im aimin at ya "bean", but nigga this aint Goya
u a ""gifted" rapper cuz i wouldnta paid for ya
decent wordplay, nothing stellar, but decent- solid rhymes again.
Dis g wanna bitch, u can recieve a hunnid clips
those rhymes so bad, they make Stevie wonda flinch(ooouch)
decent punch, but stevie wonda kinda played concept line
dog u trippin, u need to get u some AK right
i spit Acid bars, make Plutonium, decay to Half-Life*
again personal on the name, decent job, but could have been worded better.. probly weakest rhyme in ur verse so far.
there aint nothin to u, u aint gon pop that
drop that, u just a pussey in a jock strap askin for is cock back(ooooh)
this was doo doo for text... i dont wanna read bout any gun reference in a text battle on i-net, kinda filler bar all in all punch wasn't very clever it just rhymed well.
rap verse allowin hoes n sluts, wit no flows n such
wit crippled ass flows like they hold a crutch
said flows twice in the same bar, if this was worded better it'd be a nice punch here.... decent as is.
unlike Jay, and Kells u the Less Of Both Worlds
n nebody that reads ya text, is gon hurl
blah... filler
u can exit now... , but u wont b right back
cuz u like that, in the room gettin spanked by Mike Jack..HAAAAAAAAA
another weak closer...... you started stronger than ur opponent but fell off at the end dramatically with played concepts.... Ima vote String but barely, both had some weak points and some strong points but at least String wasn't inventing words...1
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