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Voted For: Tstorm

InGage

T storm,i'll naturaly heat you the way your body keeps your pee warm//
Make you reform, Retreat! from my million killer bee swarm// I'm stormin castles, the way you stormin T//
I should call you education the way you fuckin bornin me//
Your fuckin shit,the way you postin verses// You'll be in the coffin while i'm coastin hearses// To the the fuckin morge//
Think you'll hurt me, scince when did feelings hurt a cyborg//
This is number nine i'm on my way to ten// Don't try to play that shakespear when you battle me again//
^ Basically i couldn't make a structure out of that ya punches were weak some self-glory flow fu*ked and personals blah rhymes...not good at all seriously ur lucky ur new to this elevate and do it quick

Tstorm

gona see ya true whackness...soon as i submit this page
sayin ya shit stinks is a fact..coz u permanently en-gaged
^ Nice opener good start

the song says, road is long...well for u it must be blinding
u couldnt "cum hard" if u were a pedo..during child minding
^ Punch is good but i don't agree wit that particular bar

i cud drop dope lines...but from u theyd get no recognition
ive seen more "spark"...coming from my cars faulty ignition
^ lol good punch

God was wrong,..when he said "for everyone theres hope"
shuffling cards, is the closest youll come to flippin a "joke"
^ Lol another good punch again

now theres no need to cry, chill..no need to get all irrate
ya whack as hell, but going home..u guaranteed to elevate
^ lol @ the closer good again

Overall
Tstorm...why did you even try you had some real dope flow and structure was on point to the max punches were dope some good personals good metas and wordplay was on point too...InGage seriously u need to elevate before battlin again try to seperate your bars to make it look clearer and lose the // it's mad newb also u need to work on ya vocab but you got beat easily today...

RTF in ma sig as the post limit in my battle is too high

V/Tstorm