Voted For: RED BEAM

red beam got this one

GK-You think your unbreakable but you spit wit a flaw...
Sayin the same thing over n over again like Tim McGraw...
^^okay punch good opener
Withdraw your account...
before your records an embarrassment...
Wont be underground even if you were in the basement...
^structure was fucked up and didnt rhyme that much wack punch attempt
Could write your spit in crayon and it wouldnt melt...
Leavin' you wit more holes then on a fat mans belt....
Red Beams fucked like Robin without Batmans help...
^^okay punch coulda been better
Dawg lets out a yelp... like im standin on his tail...
Couldnt feel your lines even if they were in braillie...
^^okay punch if it wasnt played
You fail to realize you cant rap without a vocabulary...
If you punched with a knife you would stab me rarly...
^^weak punch coulda been harder if worded better
Actin like Darth Vader swinging around your red beam...
I just merked ya now tell us how being dead seems...
^^ dont make much sence cuz merkin some1 dont make them dead...okay for a closer i guess

coulda came harder and punches and peronsals lacked.you did a punch about vocab and actually u needed it too...structure was okay kinda messed up in some spots saw a few multi's flow was okay...4/10

red-gkillahs, im bout to rob u for my easy win
treat u like "a lotto scratcher" im bout to show u "the big spin"
^^lol good opener but structure was off
u aint hardcore...release them thoughts from yo brain
im something like "sideshow bob" when im going insane
^^nice punch but a lil self glorification
U wunna call yo self raw, but ur spam aint beef
we can dig deeper in dirt, than athletes rockin cleets
^^lol good punch flow was nice
u think u somewhere at the top, but i spoil ya dreams steady
and have u tumble down slowly like a party full of confeddy
^^haha humerous punch..its spelled confetti
my punches'll fade you up, matter fact, give u a taper
"RIP" this canada fag apart like a blank sheet of paper
^^okay punch coulda been better
im nuthin to play wit, told u once, and now u headed for danger
look dawg, mind ya folks, dont beef with strangers
^^okay punch coulda been a little harder if worded better
tha morale of this story...is how a coward got merked
i cant "RIP" u all day, eat some breakfast first
^^good closer okay punch

lacked vocab...structure was good..punches were hittin...kinda weak personal....no multi's....flowed pretty good....okay drop...
7/10

v/RED BEAM

peace~1

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