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IP:
Your Flow And Structure Are Garbage...
That Needs To Be Fixed Cuz It Doesnt Read Right...
But Your Content, Emotion, And Storyline Was Nice...
That Other Shit Needs To Be Fixed Though...
You Need Atleast Keep A Steady BASIC Flow...
You Dont Even Need A Complex Rhym Scheme...
Just Something More Stable Then What You Have...
Stay Up And Keep Writing...
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