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Old 11-23-04, 04:44 PM   #15
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Voted For: â€- Gødz Ã…ngël â€-

Pretty weak battle actually...

spinn: fix your structure! 1-2 was pretty lame, 3 was something i guess,4 was quite decent i suppose,6-7 was so played and 8 was okay. You need more hardhitting personals and punches, up your vocab and wordplay and fix that structure!

â€- Gødz Ã…ngël â€- : 1-2 was decent intro, 3-4 don't use the same punch again, you already had the "spin" and "win" thing.5-6, my favo lines of ya verse, they were all right. 7-8: played.Personals and punches can use some work, your structure and flow is good but improve your vocab and wordplay it's a little too basic...

Vote goes to â€- Gødz Ã…ngël â€-

(no hating btw, just trying to help...)
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