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Old 11-23-04, 04:50 PM   #21
~Lady Fiya~
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Voted For: DrasticMeasureZ

fuck ya basic flows-your whack just face it hoe--
dras refuses to step it up-otherwise he'd break his toes--
^very nice opener, but that was basically it.. you started to fall over within your verse.. u had sum decent punches, BUt u didn't come hard enuff my opinion.. DMZ i wasn't feeling ur first bar, u coulda worded that better, the parentheses shit ain't kickin' it, but it was minor, so it didn't have a huge effect on your verse.. i don't like how u used the same word in one line "ill"-his name, couldn't be "ill".. blah but not bad.. the starburst bar was kinda funny, lmfao, with the line using his blood to creat art.. ur last bar didn't rhyme, lol, however u had hard the harder punches in this battle that's why i think u won this one.. ur structure was better sumwhat.. vocab wayy better than mentally ill's only thing is ur choice of rhymin' words, and ur flow sumwhat.. good luck, u won this one..
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