this drop isnt too bad,short but allright.nice rhyme's in it.bar's could be slightly longer,the last verse need's to be stretched a bit more..
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she smiled at me I said Suck my dick,
she said she dont swallow but she'll Take a lick,
if it's dry then bitch Spit on it,
i needa cum,then split so make it real slick.
suck it good But make it quick,
Cause I gota take a shit,
why the fuck you still listning This song’s over…
fuck i hate my work it's Time to quit.

blah.

just giving you an example of longer bar's.

but keep this shit coming.