yo yo ahm up an down tha window wacthin fo mah
enomise ploting mah death
prayin on me to make one fatal mistake
drop to mah knees lord ahm beggin you plz
dont let them get me paranuyde off weed
unsucure thougts ratail mah brain ahm losen my mind
ahm goin insaine i got mah infer red beams locked on
semis coked on ready to blast ahm goin all out talkin them all
if not atleast one i live a thug life peaple say lifes an game to
be played but me i fuckin hate games survival of tha fistist to tha
day we pass on

This wasn't very good there was hardly any rhymes the flow was basic structure unstable punches lacked...perhaps some emotion but it seemed like you were just speaking...3.5/10 you need to up that layout and add more rhymes...RTF on my open mic plz...

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List of people who've Ducked Me:
KnightShade
mAtW
Bizzy