yo yo ahm up an down tha window wacthin fo mah
enomise ploting mah death
prayin on me to make one fatal mistake
drop to mah knees lord ahm beggin you plz
dont let them get me paranuyde off weed
unsucure thougts ratail mah brain ahm losen my mind
ahm goin insaine i got mah infer red beams locked on
semis coked on ready to blast ahm goin all out talkin them all
if not atleast one i live a thug life peaple say lifes an game to
be played but me i fuckin hate games survival of tha fistist to tha
day we pass on

work on ur spelling.i forced my self to finish reading this piece.spelling is discouraging.
ur rhyme scheme needs improvement.first line doesn't fit in at all.
emotion was there and after reading this twice i kinda get how u want me to see it.
if u want feed bak fix it up.make it easier to read.nobody wants to struggle to read.

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I'm like CHUCKy dyin' to live in the flesh free of the BATTERY,
ASSAULT n ROBBERY rapidly,wishin' cupid would clap at me
N lift this evil spell so I can experience happilly evil backwards-see(down there)
EVIL............backwards =............LIVE