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Old 11-28-04, 03:43 AM   #19
teknikal vuez
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Voted For: J.R. Freeze

Damn This Battle Was Hott As Fuck.. Serious Flames..

BREAKDOWN:


IE

this wack emcee trys to..."Gain The Strength.... like "Steroid-Injections"....
not knowing im "Hard To See" like the "Last Image" in da "mirra Reflecting"...
Damn, Nice Opener.. Hits Hard
im guess'in u thought this was a joke..... not knowning i shatter geeks...
ya "Neck The Truth" and i need to get a "Grip On Reality"..
I Smell Personal
why battle-me son! I "Roast Suckers"... Bustin Hard like Broke-Rubbers...
Smoke and Toast Duckers... I'm like "Ray Stanz" the way I " Ghost - Busters"... *ha get it*
Damn, That Was Flames
I Attack J.R and Strip strips like a "weak beattle juice costume"...
would shot at ya head.... but ya flow already got a Flip-Flop-Tune....
Actually Wasnt Feeling This Man, Not Your Best
this is u'r stop wait...*ZOOOM*.... u'r skill's is about as close as the nigga in the next coast...
so its "Obviously u'll lose"... but maybe not... why dont u ask George "W" how to cheat out Votes.... BITCH!!
OMFG, That Was ..... Damn Best Line Of The Battle

Highlights:
Good Punches, Your Multies Were There..

DimLights:
Only Saw One Personal.

Overall:
This Verse Was On Point But Keep Me Lingering On A Few Lines.


JR

I Diminish this GAL~COMPLETELY, Become a *Violent Pedirtrist* if PLAN~TO~“DE-FEET”~ME, Cause I’m straight *Impaling* this *Dick*like PRINCE~ALBERT~PIERCINGS!!!/
LOL Good Multies And Punch, But Flow is Terrible
*Flip the world Upside side* you Still can’t “RAISE HELL”~ON~THE~MIC, And *working for “SONY”* can’t even give you a *Positive* “STEREO”~“TYPE”, cause this *faggot*
takes more *POUNDS* to the *ASS* than bitches with ~CELULITE~!!! (LMAO!!)
DAMN, Good Multies Good Flow And Good PUnches Back To Back To Back
I’m RAPIN’~HIS~VERSE, I’m *eating you for Lunch*, no need to WAIT~FOR~DESERT…Cause it’s like you facing the *EAGLE’S DEFENCE…There’s no ESCAPING~THIS~“KEARSE”!!!/ (Curse)
Damn Nice Dun, Good Multies
You GETS~NO~RESPECT! This “newbie” could “operate on Animals”, we still BET~HE’S~NO~“VET”/
I remove yo HEAD~FROM~YO~NECK, You couldn't "GAIN INTEREST" on RV if you were "CREDIT~CARD~DEBT"//
(yyyeeeeaaaa)
Damn Hott Closer Nice.


Highlights:
Good Punches, Multies, And Flow

DimLights:
No Personals.....

Overall:
Verse Was On Point, But Could Of Been Alot Hotter With Some More Personals..


Comparison:
Opener : TIE
Closer : IE
Consistencey : JR, Cause IE left Me Hanging ON A Few Bars..


IE, If You Wouldnt Of Left Me Hanging Without A Punch Or Hard Personal Multi At The End Of Those Two Lines.. You Would Have Won This Battle, But JR Squeezed It Out..
JR The Only Thing I Suggest Is Put Your ~Multies Inside The~
So Your Verse Doesnt Look So Sloppy.. And Get Rid Of The " And Use Bold, Cause IT Just Makes It Look Sloppy And Hard To Read, Wich Ruins The Flow Most Of The Time.. GJ


Please Please Please Return An Honest Vote Below..
Its Only Six Lines, So Its Not A Complex Thing..
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