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Old 11-29-04, 06:05 AM   #9
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Voted For: Introspect

Socrates

Intro tryin make it in the game?Will never you fuckin lame
By the time I post you'll prolly have ANOTHER new name
^ Lol nice personal in the opener

Him and *Troop* be faggot partners, and love the same
Troop is gunna make it in the game...since intro IS the game
^ More a diss on Troop but again another personal

I'm done with a short verse, fuck Intro ya gettin kinda savvy
How are you not gay with a close-up of men's lips in ya avy?
^ Gay line played punch...could've been much better

Overall
Soc you probably hate 6 liners as much as me it don't really let you say much but you got 2 bars of good personals and finished wit a played punch...flow & structure was good but apparantly to you they don't matter but i thought i'd comment on that rhyming was good...6.5/10

Introspect

like oragamics you just fold up they dont laugh cause your rhymes filled wit hoo HA'S..
legend?you dont exist like mortal-comics rhymes dont hold up like your moms bras..
^ 2 different rhymes in there nice punch good opener hoo ha's lmao crazy

im "eatin..." his rhymes "ass" like r kelly lyrically he aint screamin rape!..
beatin his ass turnin colors like contrast..cause his lips always open like paris in her tape
^ Lol decent punch again the hidden eaten ass bit too quite good

kid couldnt flow on a water bike..his life explained in just one link...
he got the def to laugh outloud by spitin on tha mic..he steady *ridin low*but forgot tha INC
^ Nice closer punch/personal/wordplay good closer

Overall
Intro your verse had more punches personal at the end was good flow & struc was cool but Soc's was better on that account...but your disses were harder hitting the hoo ha's bit made me laugh i think you were better in this verse more punches and they were fresher...anything to work on next time would prolly be vocab but you got this so...

Good battle peoples...V/Introspect
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