here... ima be real nice, I think you got potential to make a nice track, but you have to stop rushing words into ur bars, I've heard you do it for a while but this track is really easy to point out... "Like black celebrity greats.... when you say celebrity you completely switch tempo and it ruins your whole sound... "we blast the gats"... when you went on that little rhyme scheme you were comfortable and you were just riding the beat, sometimes when you get on a 3 or 4 syllable word you rush through it like your afraid ur gonna fall behind the behind the beat... work on that, cuz thats one of the main things I think you really need to work on-- If you could cut that down, and improve your pronounciation a bit, I dont think I'd ever hate on you again... good luck. keep droppin.

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