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Originally Posted by streetryda
critique this!!!!
Im breachin zeke and deke'n his punches and stuntin this yungin's growth...
im gross like cigarette smoke, float in ya lungs leadin to murda she wrote...
You tryed to hard to flow and missed out on a hard punch
coat ya ass with lead cuz i cocked and stocked it with 16 hollow tips quick...
emit ya to heaven cuz i stoop'd to Zeus' group levels and write fluke hits...*
No
Bettin me and hound leave ya steppin down now thats a simple Epic Ultimatum...*
played~em and deflate~em cuz this made~em outa breath with how i degrade~em...
ehhh
rezerektin~em but my lines infectin~em and wreckin~em in a state of emergency...
forsee the mercy after my punches start roundin up like im battlin guernseys...*
almost
sicker flows? ya wicker goes out when my quicker wind blows and shows ya up...*
baretta's i stick both up and boast up about my heat got ya ina toasted muck...
wack
roast this kid who claims to take RV to its grave but see ur lines are played...
sawyed the verdit away cuz i persuade the votes cuz i displayed how ur afraid...
wigitty wack
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Ok, look, quite the multi's for now and start paracticing on throwing harder punches and use more personels, also, you have to get more complex with your wordplay, after you elevate in that, then you can start battling with flow and mult'is add dope punches wordplay and personels and it'll be a deadly conection. As of now, you look like you would do well in songs and topicals... try a lil of that