Vote= Cometaphoretune

Your verse was thrown together very sloppy and it killd your rhyme scheme.....AS far as metaphors go, the snake part was iight.. So was the throw you out west england part... Metpahors could have been better.. Punchs werent really that hard.. You should up on Vocab and multis to help out your verse..

Tricksta, your rhyme scheme was good.. But it was basic over all, alot of newbie cats who just start to get good use that rhyme scheme, so unless you gunna hit it hella hard, stay away from it.. Punchs werent bad...Coulda been a lil harder, and more than half your verse ive heard just worded other ways...


OnE