Voted For: RED BEAM

Emcee:RED BEAM

Verse:
lyrically abusing MC's, i thought u heard i dont stop
my name rings bells like sunday at 12 o'clock
~~~~~Nice punch but a lil self glorifying
this is a straight rhyme battle, no personals or beef
red beam rips beats like hoe ripping these streets
~~~~~again nice but a lil self glorifying
suprised my dick aint silver, tha way im fucking these dymes
and u'd think i was a angry cokehead,tha way im "punching-these-lines"
~~~~~Nice meta...and a lil wordplay
i eat a pound of chicken, cause i love spittin greasy
and i think ur tha one hating cause u cant please me
~~~~~first line was dope..
but im straight, like indian hair, get it right
and u'd think my dick was a floppy disk, tha way u "saving- these-bytes"
~~~~~Killer...thats the K.O
i roll right, you roll left, or somewhere outta my sight
one hit, knocking out ya lights, nigga saying good night
~~~~~ok meta...

Comments:not bad work on not glorifying yourself aiight fam...a lil more vocab too

Marks:
Wordplay - 6/10
Metas - 6/10
Vocabulary - 5/10
Structure - 6/10
Punches - 7/10
Opener - 5/10
Closer – 5/10
Personals – 4/10
Enjoyment – 6/10
Creativity - 7/10
Overall - 57/100
~~~~~~57%


Emcee:Heavy Artillery

Verse:
Yo this kid steps up, not knowing who hes stepping to
this cat lost one already, I'm about to make it 2.
~~~~~Gay...
If you think that rappin is the way you better take a detour
I'm ready to blow up on 5, and you wont even C4.
~~~~~nice meta...
And where Im from the blocks be so hot your feet'll melt
and if we aiming from a distance then you'll be sure to see yourself.
~~~~~ok....
This cat claims to be the best but yo the best is yet to come
this niggas "easy-baked" so come up off the mic your done.
~~~~~blah....a meta..nothin special
He wants to spit it hard, but wait who ordered his ugly flows
when it comes to battling me you comin up shorter that mugsy bouges.
~~~~~best line...

Overall....i think that red beam takes this because he came off harder....heavy...just elevate fam...not bad for your second battle...

Return the Favor in the sig..

V/Redbeam


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