Ight, you wanted my feedback, so here it is..............

The storyline was indepth and deep, but there were a couple of lines that I didn't understand at first, but reading on, I got the gist. The base of this open mic was your word play, it helped the paper flow in and out of each topic. However, the "bitches, stitches, snitiches" line is old, I have heard it too many times. You had a few metaphors, but I insist next time, add a little bit more than what you have.

I give it a

8.5/10

Very Good Open Mic

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