Yo nino...good beginning...middle slipped a bit tho...lost ya flow...but picked back up at tha end...make tha middle good as tha beginning and end and you all set...

and about tha real thing...i think most yall dont know tha concept of real...real isnt what you think is real...or what tha producers think is real...real is what you, yourself KNOW is real...if you spit and you can sit back and say..."hey...i can relate to this" then you real...till you can do dat you jus a slave to tha game...

One last thought...nice ta see some more white boyz rappin...keep it real son