well both came i guess weak...ok battle......

Poppa-ehhh good verse....but you dsidnt have alot of story...seemed rushed...not alot of imagery from the beginning but the ending was improving...

akwordz-you had no story/ backround or empathatical/chronological order.......your verse seemed as if it was missin somethin......It was good how you described some aspects of the life but fix your structure your current one is too hard to read...

Ill poll later

blah! v/ Poppa

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