v/ for$aken.....

well flow-your drop wasnt up to your skill level.....
your story oculdve been excellent with a new style of narration but you failed to put a stroy/twist or great emotion into it.......Im sorry for the mistake and wish I could start over.....but....

For$aken-I thought the guy killing pregnant woman woul; be kinda played after Eminem made a song on it, "Stan", but the ending was very good...you told it in a calm manner hwich suited the ending morso because the insanity made her death sound normal....

good job both

v/ for$aken...

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