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indeph-aight u conveyed imagry in yours........you stayed on the topic more.........you had facts about cuban immigration.......your flow kinda seemed to fall off here and there tho.......good story man.......
drastic-your flow seemed off more than ideph's..........your structure was iffy..........you didnt have too much of a rhyme scheme goin on there..........you kinda went off topic......i understand ur fisrt verse was setting up the topic but it kinda took away from the topic itself........just next time try to convey all your lines towards the topic.......just elevate some man......no disgrace in trying man......
v/indeph. 
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