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Old 12-06-04, 09:35 AM   #28
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Voted For: WeeDex

Sup Weedex, sound like a type of Windex, 0-1, not gonna let u win text.
Smellin the agent, get those effects, window cleanin only way you’ll impress.
(MAYN WTF...PLAYED OUT, BUT FUNNY...7/10)

Ok enuff about windows, forgot one factor, ima fuck u round like a chiropractor.
U got no flow, u got no skills, ur penis is growin slow cos u stunning it wid pills
Ok time to exit, ill see ya later, soon you’ll be sent to OZ, convicted child raper.
(YO MAN I DONT KNO WHO SHOWED YOU TO BATTLE BUT YOU NEED STRUCTURE...THERE ARE UNEVEN LINES...AND YOUR FLOW IS KINDA NOT THERE...LOL...GET SOME STRUCTURE, FLOW, AND ELEVATE YOUR SKILLS...)



Vest not needed, chest not bleeding/
I’ll leave you like a five-dollar ho just pleading/
(NICE FLOW, MULTIE USE, AND PUNCHES...7/10)

And begging/ regretting/ not forgetting the sweating/
Does it make you dumb, when you come from inbreeding?/
(MULTIES ALL OVER...NICE WORDPLAY, AND DISS OF INBREEDING...8/10)

Im WeeDex, straight from the depths of hell!/
About colobus is a weird story to tell/
(TO PLAIN FOR A BATTLE...IT FLOWED, LOL...ITS A SELF GLORIFACATION BAR REALLLY...COULD HAVE LEFT IT OUT...6/10)

Of how his parents were bro & sis and how in love they fell/
And his name should be Columbus but he’s too dumb to spell!
(DECENT ENDER, COULD HAVE RE WORDED IT AND MADE IT MORE RAW AND MEAN...HAD GOOD FLOW AND THE LAST LINE WAS A GOOD PUNCH...)

AIGHT MAYN...YOUR FLOW WAS GOOD...YOU HAD DECENT PUNCHES, GOOD USE OF MULTIES, PUNCHES, DISSES, AND WHAT NOT...YOUR STRUCTURE WAS OKAY, BUT IT COULD USE A LITTLE BIT OF WORK...OVERALL YOUR VERSE WAS GOOD, JUST ELEVATE ON THE LEVEL OF KEEPING SELF GLORIFACATION BARS OUT OF YOUR VERSES...SO YOU GET MY VOTE...

VOTE/WEEDEXX

AND RETURN THE FAVOR IN MY BATTLE AGAINTS LIL CHUBBS, THE LINK IS POSTED IN MY SIG...THANKS FAM...~1~
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