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Voted For: BLACK~MAGIK

KING

this "Black" Kat is tamed, hes never stomped these streets...
only "Magic" seen is when I burried him "deep" cuz he faced defeat...
(DECENT OPENER...FLOW WAS GOOD, AND NICE PUNCHES...7/10)

he hasnt dropped his verse yet, cuz his shit is all pre-written...
thinks hes big for fittin in big lines like its cocain hes sniffin...
(NICE WORDPLAY...FLOWS WELL...7/10)

I havnt seen anything "hard hittin" from this over rated trick...
why you all ride his dick? his lyrics are more retarded then the pink patrick...
(DECENT BUT PLAYED...FLOWS WELL...7/10)

what! he has one win, oh my god... well he did face a fucken poser...
so he hasnt even proven to beat me, all ima say is, this kat is a phoney composer...
(WEAK CLOSER...DECENT FLOW, AND NO DIRECT PUCH, JUST ACCUSATIONS...7/10)

AIGHT YOUR VERSE WASNT BAD...YOU HAD GOOD FLOW, SOME MULTIE USE...YOUR STRUCTURE WAS OKAY, COULD BE BETTER...YOU HAD DECENT WORDPLAY, BUT YOU NEED TO COME MORE RAW WITH YOUR SHIT...NAH MEAN...ELEVATE A LIL BIT...OVERALL IT WASNT BAD...

BLACK~MAGIK

..I'm quick-to-hit-you-with, missles that'll split-this-bitch..
..Get pistol-whipped, and end-this-kid, in a minute-spit..
(DECENT OPENER...MULTIES EVERYWHERE...PUNCHES ARE GOOD...8/10)

..This ho-is-over, watch his head, roll-like-boulders..
..get shot-quick, like-rockets, and I'mma de-throne-this-poser..
(NICE WORD PLAY, FLOW IS GOOD, AGAIN NICE USE OF MULTIES AND METAS...8.5/10)

..Break-ya-neck-man, stretch his body out, like elastic head-bands..
..You're a dead-man, if words dont do it, the lead-can..
(NICE FLOW...MULTIES...PUCH IS DECENT, BUT TRY NOT TO OVER PLAY GUN PLAY...7/10)

..Get socked-in-the-eye, for saying you're rockin-the-mic..
..And I dont rap with the force of Jesus, shit, I'm God-in-disguise..
(OKAY BAR...PLAYED OUT...HEARD SHIT LIKE THIS BEFORE...BUT A DECENT PERSONAL...7/10)

..So step-ya-game-up, cuz with no hesitation, the tech'll-spray-ya..
..And this verse is quick to leave you sittin' up all nite, like noisy-neighbors..
(PLAYED...PUNCH DECENT...WORK ON FLOW...7.5/10)

..You feel-me-man? Cuz when I say I'm a killer, I really-am..
..And I'll leave ya fucking head spinning faster, than ceiling-fans..
(FIRST LINE NO GOOD...SECOND LINE DECENT WORDPLAY AND USE OF MULTIE...AGAIN TRY NOT TO MAKE URESELF A KILLA...U DONT GOT TO PROVE SHIT TO HIM, JUST SHOW HIM WIT CHA WORDS...8/10)

..I spit it so-hood, and like your girl, ya threads get no-looks..
..Kid calls himself the K.I.N.G? Shit, this K.id I.s N.o G.ood..*
(KINDA WEAK CLOSER...FIRST LINE IS PLAYED EXCEPT FOR THE LAST FEW WORDS...THE SECOND LINE IS A GOOD LINE...NICE DISS TO HIS NAME...7/10)

AIGHT MAGIK...YOU HAVE DECENT PUNCHES THROUGHOUT...THE ONLY REASON YOU WON THIS WAS BECAUSE OF YOUR MULTIES USE...BUT IT MESSIS UP THE FLOW IN SOME AREAS...SOME LINES HAVE TO MANY TOPICS, AND MAKES IT CONFUSING TO READ AND UNDERSTAND...AND TRY NOT TO BE TO GANGSTA WITH IT...NAH MEAN...YOU DONT HAVE TO PROVE NOTHING TO ANYBODY HERE EXCEPT YOURSELF...SO KEEP THE SELF GLORIFACATION OUT OF YOUR VERSES AND WORK ON DISSIN HIM THROUGHOUT THE VERSE...OH AND TRY NOT TO USE ~ TO MUCH...MAKES URE VERSE LOOK BAD...BE MORE PROFFESIONAL WITH IT AND TAKE THAT SHIT OUT...HAVE BETTER STRUCTURE, AND IT WILL HELP WITH THE FLOW, SO THE READER DOESNT HAVE TO STOP AND GO...

VOTE/ BLACK~MAGIK....HE KILLED YOU WITH MULTIES