ok I.Mind..I udnerstand its good to keep the same rhyme scheme..
but this is a topical battle..its always better to hav more emotion in it..
and plus having origninality in it..and you truly need to quit overusing vocab
it kills all your flow..but I did like your structure and complexity of it..

Prem.

I loved this shit...I sware you rap just like talib kweli..I think you are him..

anyways..I liked how you had the two sides of life in it..which is all true

I'm feelin the flow and emotion in it..orignal..nothin bad to say..

vote/prem

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