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Old 12-06-04, 11:31 PM   #16
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nice shit bro. in one word - enthralling. haha. it doesnt work how u wrote 'an' instead of 'a' tho in places. (Like an cloud, It was an hawk, took out an pencil) u only write 'an' if the first letter of the next word is a vowel. other than that this was a good read. keep em coming. tight.
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Spit it from the heart, spit a thousand darts, split ya head apart…
Emcees depart, like rubin carter my hurricane left u scarred…
Like a spiked bat grammatical bar, like a wonderland drug…
Tumble - ing like a flagon of rum and 2 blunts, like the funk baby…
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