Anxeity: need to work on how ya write it... it has to have a good beginging and a plot and an end that fits good with the topic...you reaslly lacked the beginging...the ending was better..buut it ddint give a good..one on my mind

Nos: your was good overall but you ddi lack some flow in ya verse... you staye on the topic better...ya ending kinda fell off a little but then got back up.....

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