iight, to make yourself better put it like this...
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Originally Posted by *Troop*
Soc's Methods are Not Superior there isnt any Demeanor in Rhyme
This Childs Play why Havent u seen Soc On past 10 Pm Eastern Time
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Okay, first off fake personal, second off, this isnt a punch even if it was true it is just saying "Oh socrates is a kid, cuz he goes to bed early", a punch needs to ATTACK your opponent like....
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Originally Posted by ME right now
I was gunna battle Soc and quickly severe his head
So i made a callout thread at 7pm..
.......... but his mom had already called him to bed!
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See you're attacking me going to bed early, and at the same time saying i am sleeping with my mom, rather than trying to get voters to do math in there head about time zones and call it complex....
Now, a super dope punch would be....
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Originally Posted by James Bondage
Nigga.. hop off the Aim List, and stop with the name flips
Number One!? Get real evolve - that means you Aint Shit!
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he's attacking his claim to be number one by saying that "yes you are number one, but not shit" i dunno how to explain tis much more but its ill
Also...
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Originally Posted by Fracture
You see, I’ll smash ya skull.. Leave a hole n’ it will cave then..
Swing at ya jaw.. turn the ‘roof’ of ya mouth into the basement!
You’re a b-boy vet, but you can bet the rookies are worse..
I had never seen more cum lines until I looked at your shirt!
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Now thats just fuckin ill, wordplay, flow, metaphors, its got it all
Now something a lil more your style....
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Originally Posted by Fracture
Richard Corey? Your really white, so u better switch ur story..
..Cause we all know ‘you ain’t fuckin black’ like a Hitler orgy!
I don’t give a shit man to advance I got a big plan..
Now you’ll ‘never be safe’ like playing baseball in quicksand!!
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Now notice this and your style and quite similar, but the major difference dope ass set ups, wording, and creativity, you cant go off something anyone can think of. Doing so is not creativity, its just whack. So try and get and get everything in your verse.
Im not much of an elevator but I tried dammit. You wont start getting better for a while but just be pateient and keep working
*takes breath*