aight heres what i think of it...it was good man..your bars are a lil short though..if you put two bars together you would have a good flow and some mulits...lemme show you wat im talkin about...
last time i flopped a bit
so i stopped a bit

if you put these together and make it

last time i flopped a bit so i stopped a bit//

make that shit like one bar cuz one that will make your flow tighter and it will give you some mulits in your verses...

thats just my 2 cents....tite verse though man...stay up 1