I took one of your similies and flipped it into a way that it would sound like a more hard hitting punch....just to give you an example.

Your Similie
just comprehend you cant step, you "see my spits is crimes"
ripped up....hawk gets lit up like "trees at christmas time"

Reworded
Just comprehend you cant step, just take this blessing.... Jesus
It sickens me.... even christmas trees get lit up less than he does

I hope that helps a little

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