Damn Homie...structure i don't like but i used to use it so i ain't too mad...metaphors were decent...multies were on point though a few were stretched, your lines wurr a bit stretched..0-10 scale i give you a 8.5...

Best lines/Fav lines-
dis ~dumb hoe~ like a cold pussy dis little ~cunt frozed~//
i ~hunt those~to ~tuck souls~and buck more holes in you then ~ bum clothes~//
like your sister on her period, Hang is a ~annoying bitch~//
get ~boiled with hits~you forgot your laxatives cuz you was never in ~control of shit

Lines you Could Have Kept-
Ya whole opener except last two lines...

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