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Old 12-19-04, 02:21 PM   #24
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karnevil_kid

Your name is Gods angel aka ill emcee//
If your sick of rap dog then just leave the scene//
^bit played but still works for me

Your dream is to beat me but this is a battle to the death//
so when you lose tell god that I want to battle him next//
^good one

you say you’re an angel but you say your from hell//
are you lost dog? Do you need a map for help?//
^decent i guess

am I making you nervous I didn’t mean to scare//
but ive been to hell twice and I aint never seen you there//
^nah...

fuck the tables lets just turn the chairs in this verse//
cause im sending you home like suicide in a church//
^uhm, not really feeling your closer

Decent drop but improve your rhymes n vocab to make it lil more complex but you had some stuff in there that (if it was worded bit different or complex) could be hardhitting.


Godz Angel

Karnevil kid thinks he knows all about the real evil seed of satin,
He has been choking, but the wole time he thought he was waitin,
^decent opener

Proves what he knows, not what his records doesnt even know,
After I said peace, you asked if war was over and if he could go,
^not really feeling it

This shit is not fictional, its the truth, the monster uder the bed,
Forgot to cover your intelgence, and he lost track of your head,
^good one...

The master mind of you terrible rhyme, go down and hit it behind,
So your ahead, of the game yoiu arent in, Now leave, It it now time,
^hehe, definately liked this...

Your job here is done, I already cleaned out the sink and the toilet,
Thats the only thing you can spitt, is cleanin up shit,, dont spoil it.
^nice...

Im sorry I gave you your first loss, but i thought id do whats right,
This last line is suicide, I will always persue with fear in the night.
^nope, closer doesn't do trick for me

Vocab was good, could've had some more original stuff in there but that's aight.Had some good hardhitting punches in there so overall good drop!
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