I Liked it mayne **HONESTLY** Um If you Need some Advice id Say Try To Make It a lil More wordy ,..............I Know ppl say Not to B To wordy But ut was like you Cheated Yaself wit those short lines But Other Than That I Think you Should Record that Jus for a Demo or wateva..........And oh yeah Try To Work On Ya Vocabs .,But Those are basics and you prolly wont thiinkin bout it at the time were you? But other than that i seen no Mistakes

KEEP IT UP MYN!!!!