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Old 12-21-04, 07:21 PM   #11
Parallel
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gunit.101
ok you had some good stucture and flow but shit you just need a lil work on punchlines...you have them but you need work on them...worpdlay the same thing goes too...metaphores were used pretty welll...but im not to on them anymore....you didnt really use to much vocab but meh alright verse..keep it up no hate

Mista_Authetiq
lol...nice name fam....meh good verse...weak stcuture...pretty good flow i guess...vocab was kiinda weak...but your punchlines and vocabulary were pretty tight...i liked your first bar..the opener...that was a tight line...but i feel you took this guy easy...pz

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