no...its not like you are gonna lose because your structure sucks and you really had an ill verse...I rewrote your verse in vet structure for you...Im gonna help you out...and dont get pissed...voters can't see this until after they vote so its not swaying...

ignite your name...rehearse your pre written verse 3 more times and i bet the fight ends the same...
even your pre writes are lame...its like i put your PlayStation to ablaze by the way i light your game...
->>end of the first bar should be reworded to rhyme better...stretched as fuuuuck..."to ablaze" doesnt make sense..ablaze is an adjective not a verb...light your game is kind of a stretch just to rhyme...then you had to create the whole second half of the second bar to explain it...youre writing your verse around that wack urbanflowz structure but you arent good enough to do that...theres no rule that says you have to have 4 multis per bar...dont do it unless you can make it sound natural...
wack...youre basically providin the definition..kid u lost this shit from the start confidin wit the opposition...
denied being a musician...competitively opposin me?...i'll hole Punch you like you colliding wit my ammunition...
->>first line doesnt make sense unless you're talking about when I pmed you to tell you I no-showed to write a college essay...but then nobody knows about that except you and me...you shouldve explained...the whole second line doesnt make sense...its still really stretched and you are still saying shit that doesnt make sense just to get multis...
your spit is thru...and like my previous bars you already been ripped in two...
and this ia true...they like pimps callin out hos for bjs...bitch ya blew...
->>this is a good bar length for you...you should write all your bars about this length...its still obvious you are reaching hard for your multis but not as bad...the second part of the second line doesnt make sense...well it does...but its terrible...
i laughed at how you chose to lay text...dudes lines been played to test...
call me out again and i'll put wires in your mouth like Kanye West...
->>shouldve said played to death instead of played to test...the wires like kanye west thing is PLAAAAAYED...but you are getting better flow here at the end this is a good length and you arent reaching as much...one of the better bars in your verse...
i'm too sick too boast..but this cat is fast to hit base cuz he's quick to post...
this was just a roast...and i got you askin for shade in this battle like you need a ghost...
->>worst example of not making sense just so you can rhyme that ive ever seen...
3 min. keystyle..kinda makes me wonder if he tends to munch..but either way i'll end this dunce...
he needed help so i lent a bunch..yet emailin me boxing gloves is the only way schema can send a punch...
->>mailing boxing gloves thing is played to DEATH...youre still stretching for multis...tends to munch?

you arent good enough to use that structure...point blank...even if you were you still shouldnt because it is annoying...dont use quotations and hyphens...theyre annoying...dont explain punches or put shit like (get it?)...dotn put numbers or slashes at the end of your bars...if your line is so long that it runs over onto two lines it is too long...unless you write like this...

blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah...
blah blah blah blah...
..........................blah blah blah blah...

shoot for 12-15 syllables per line...youre trying to fit way too much into one line...write however you feel comfortable but most people that are good use one of two structures...

blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah...
blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah...

OR

blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah...
blah blah blah blah...
..........................blah blah blah blah...

vets never write like this...

blah blah blah-blah-blah blah "blah blah"(1)/
blah-blah..!!//?1
blah blah blah blah blah-blah-blah blah "blah blah blah blah blah"/
blah-blah-blah-blah blah blah blah(2) blah..!!//?2

(1) blah blah blah blah blah
(2) blah blah blah blah blah blah blah

reason being that its sloppy and annoying...people understand multis without using dashes and people will understand your wordplay without quotes...if they wont you shouldnt use it...NEVER use explanations...if people wont understand it dont use it...you ever hear pac stop in the middle of the song and explain his punches?

shoot for having your bars roughly the same length and dont ever write a multi if you cant make it sound natural AND make sense...dont write your verse around multis write your multis around your verse...good solid punchlines and wordplay are 100 times more important than multis...punches and wordplay are the steak...multis are the parsley...makes it look a lot better but if youve gotta do one or the other stick with the steak...

thats all I can think of right now...if i remember something else i wanted to say ill post again...but you shouldnt run your mouth if you suck...everyone you battle is not gonna take the time to help you...

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