Voted For: girlmerkinu



I lie her on my back starring at the sky wondering why I have not yet hanged,
But everday when I carry these chains it does nothin to me but put my soul into a constant shame,
I can't take this life no more for I have no family or I neither knew my mother,
I take you back when I was a kid only when

^^^^^^^^^^^^ NO THIS WASNT AN GOOD VERSE...NO EXPRESSIONS (FULLY)...NO CREATIVITY .........MAYNE ELEVate in every aspect of an TOPICAL battle............KID WORK ON STRUTURE........







workin all day in this hot heat no money humiditity killin me
sweat rollin down my cheek pickin cotton brush hurtin my feet
screamin in agaony as i see my mom being raped
seeing terror in her face i think its too late too escape
never learned to read or write never all because im not white
work in the sun daily but i dont see the light shine
pray to the good lord above me to see one dove tongiht
mos white bring me down i wanna c 1 make me take flight
^^^^^^^^^^^OK I LIKE THIS ONE ELEVATE THOUGH...FLOW WAS THERE..........EXPRESSION AND FEELINGS WAS THERE...........CREATIVITY ELEVATE


OVERALL= THIS IS AN ONE-SIDED BATTLE. CLEARLY GIRL WON THIS BY FLOW...EXPRESSIONS........AND FEELINGS............KKKHATER WORK ON STRUTURE AND EVERY TOPICAL BATTLE THAT HAS TO OFFER...YOU CAME WEAK FAM............NO CREATIVITY.........IMAGINARY........EXPRESSION WASNT THAT GOOD...........


V/GIRL

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