ok u had a better structure and ur wordplay wasnt the best yet it topped his and the personal at the end was nice also u took a few played concepts and made very original punches out of em so props for that
u need to work on vocab
jim u just came kinda played u lacked personals really and ur structure was stretched so do some research on ppl ur batteling and shorten ur lines
PLEASE RETURN THE VOTES honest only
http://community.rapverse.com/showb...242#post1840242
vote on it and drop any other links to peices u have or battles and i will return the favour there just seems to be a lack of voters here on the site thanx
good battle to both