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Old 12-28-04, 05:21 PM   #7
Acuity
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Dabatos:
-more of a topical than a poetic verse
-ur focus was more on plot development and less on imagery
-standard approach to the given topiv - no originality
-gd vocab
-structure was okay
-try 4 more imagerythrough uses of metaphors and similies

George
-nice structure: use of stanza's showed you thought about the themes in ur verses
-gd vocab
-imagery created all the way throught
-nice approach to given topic - evaluating the consequences

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