yea ur strucutre was off but u know what...if u read it the right way then ur flow was veerrrrry easy to grasp (good thing).....sounded like a freestyle to me....i used to flow like this when i 1st got into hip hop and i wrote my stuff down on pad and paper

now i just use microsoft word.......anyway keep lookin at the type of stuff i do....1st thing u wanna do is get a topic...second thing is that u wanna stay on it...and last thing......which is an advancement no one here on the site can do.....learn wordplay.....look at my piece hip hop warrior or final review to see what im talkin about

if u need more guidance....u know the name hit me up......im far more advanced with wordplay than anyone on here...can elevate u with ease

d.a.

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