this was pretty dope. had a nice flow to it. i liked the rhyme scheme becuz it hlped the flow and was consistant throughout the entire verse and the scheme was pretty unique. the bars were also at good length in this one..were not stretched at all through out the entire piece. i couldnt really find any weaknesses except at a few points the flow was a bit off but not that often. next time you do a piece, i recommend you be more complex. it makes it fun to read and more people will want to reply to your work.

8/10