this is ok, your bar's need to be alot longer.


A.K.A. and I’m all over the rap game//
And every night I got a new dame//
Giving me brain//
^^^
instead of saying just "given me brain" why not add soem imagery into it.
"as i lay back on the seat,the girl is now given me brain..blah...just an example.

but yeh you need to work on your structure a bit, your bar's are not even, which is fucking up the flow.
you have a bar with 22 syllable's near the start then toward's the end you have a bar with 6 syllable's...
anyway 5/10.. keep dropping
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