ya structure is kinda off...man but overall....everything was basic.....even the voab....cool shyt tho...i mean i caught a flow.....but its easier for ME....to read like this

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just my opinion.......umm freestyles are cool...but try selectin some topics man....umm u can look at my piece called final review.....its here in open mic....look around the top or middle....keep at it....if u need a link holla
i can help u elevate as well

d.a.

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