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Old 01-01-05, 06:01 PM   #21
Acuity
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Vote: ill logic

Xcell:
WTF was up wit ur structure homie.................fix that, dont use played lines 2 do wid k-mart, its jus uncreative, some of ur attempted metaphors were poor, u sacrificed ur structure for a multi flow and it werent even hard hittin and it didnt have a propa punch in it.....work on gettin more creative punches into ur verse

Ill Logic:
Shouldnt Mess Wit A Pro,Cuz I Was Created Ta Kill Hoes,
Already Dissin Yaself,U A Bitch,Even Your Location Says So,
ok, sort of a gd personal, not that hardhittin but gd - 7/10
I Burn-Foes,Punches-Is-Small, U Already Beginnin Ta-Stall,
So Watch Me Put An End To His "Flows" Like I Was A Waterfall,
nice metaphor, gd worplay n concept, nice overall - 7.5/10
Destroy-Pubs, You Better Beware What I Do To This Scrub,
Cuz I'll "Rip His Bars Apart" Like I Was Tearing "Night-Clubs",
ok closer, solid, not really a punch but decent - 7/10

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