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Old 01-03-05, 09:19 PM   #8
50hater_killer
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VOTE FLOW
No hate bro I just felt Flow's poem had more power in it I liked urs and all but flows poem had more meaning in it and I was on the edge of my seat. Here is how I graded it all together with the top sections in ur poems.


Im alone with my thoughts, More often than not
I tried to free them, But in travel they got caught
I try to speak with someone, But no one is there
So i continue to think to myself, Cuz no one cares
I sit and contemplate existence and revelations
But my mind and thoughts had prior reservations
To free them is insane, Theres no freedom in my brain
So i to cry to myself, While quietly screaming in pain
8.7/10 keep it up flow


WHYTE AV
Under a blanket of darkness I lye
And wonder staring into the black sky
What will I become and is she the one?
And their not done, they’ve only begun
I try and sort them, but those two rerun
Over and over again they play back in my head
No answers are given, but more questions instead
Will I survive on my own? Will I be alone?
Answers swirl in my head forming a deadly cyclone

7.2/10